Issue 02, Page 08

CHOOSE YOUR STARTING POINT

Issue 02, Page 08

Apologies again for another late update, the art was done for this one on time but I’ve spent the last week re-writing the dialogue because I wasn’t real happy with it. I’m still not really happy with the final dialogue but hopefully it at least conveys everything its supposed to get across here.

4 responses to “Issue 02, Page 08”

  1. Robert Avatar
    Robert

    Dialogue was pretty good for this page. Seems to be pretty straightforward.

  2. William Satterwhite Avatar
    William Satterwhite

    Hey Robert, thanks for checking in. Regarding the dialogue, it probably ended up for the best but I really chopped down and condense a lot of what I had originally written and the overall pacing of the scene was actually different from the final result (same basic endpoint, just two different paths). Again, it was probably for the best but it just led to a lot of back and forth here and there.

  3. […] The part where Allen tells Carrie he’s a superhero and she doesn’t believe him was actually a last second re-write (seems to happen a lot with me), that sequence was originally totally different but at the last second I decided I wasn’t really comfortable with the dialogue and what was going on with the scene so there went that. I think it’s kind of cute, I’d had a scene worked out in my head that showed how Carrie doesn’t like people using her real name but figured I’d throw that bit in here. Her stated reason is that it’s too “girly” but the real reason why she doesn’t like it has a lot to do with one of the many similarities she has with Allen (one of which eagle=eyed readers may have already picked up on when it was casually mentioned here). […]

  4. Kilian Avatar
    Kilian

    Semi-hot Best Friend Girl, stand by to get whiffed in 3…2…

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