Issue 02, Page 08
4 responses to “Issue 02, Page 08”
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Dialogue was pretty good for this page. Seems to be pretty straightforward.
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Hey Robert, thanks for checking in. Regarding the dialogue, it probably ended up for the best but I really chopped down and condense a lot of what I had originally written and the overall pacing of the scene was actually different from the final result (same basic endpoint, just two different paths). Again, it was probably for the best but it just led to a lot of back and forth here and there.
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[…] The part where Allen tells Carrie he’s a superhero and she doesn’t believe him was actually a last second re-write (seems to happen a lot with me), that sequence was originally totally different but at the last second I decided I wasn’t really comfortable with the dialogue and what was going on with the scene so there went that. I think it’s kind of cute, I’d had a scene worked out in my head that showed how Carrie doesn’t like people using her real name but figured I’d throw that bit in here. Her stated reason is that it’s too “girly” but the real reason why she doesn’t like it has a lot to do with one of the many similarities she has with Allen (one of which eagle=eyed readers may have already picked up on when it was casually mentioned here). […]
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Semi-hot Best Friend Girl, stand by to get whiffed in 3…2…
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